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*NoteP*          You continued your story well although you didn't follow the prompt for the assignment. The assignment was to get them on the couch touching and kissing. You can still use another thousand words to get them home on the couch getting closer. You've done well in describing the scene and relationship between the characters. I didn't see any grammar errors or spelling mistakes. Good job. Looking forward to seeing what you come up with next week.

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