Dear amlan – Welcome to Writing.com. I am glad you are a part of this amazing writing community now. I enjoyed reading "THE EXPERIENCE OF A LIFETIME."  and thought I would give your story a bit of a review.
 
  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
Woah! This is some powerful writing about an intense subject. Not only is the sky not falling, it is not tearing apart an aircraft, but both seem to be happening at the same time. The core writing for a more in depth article on some of the challenges of air travel, captures one of the more intense moments that can happen in the sky.
 
  THEME
 
While the title ushers us into a trip to Singapore in a most nonchalant way, the title might better be, “Singapore Flight 93 Terror.” (I just made the number up, I don’t know anything about flight numbers from Australia to Singapore.) Maybe the flight should have been grounded considering the weather, but the audacity of man to defy natural elements is showcased beautifully in this piece.
 
  STRUCTURE
 
This non-fiction article is written in the first person narrative in a casual style. The narrative shows the intensity of the flight through the eyes of a number of characters which keeps the monologue moving along in a very suspenseful manner. Well done.
 
  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
The whole narrative rolls along with a suspenseful air and this was one of my favorite moments:

From my studies of the aircraft designs and 747 endurance reports, I knew that the aircraft cannot be brought down by weather. It is also said that an aircraft is more vulnerable on the ground than in air, but then the weather is nature and no technology or design can survive nature's wrath. I was scared.
 
No matter what people say about flying, I am convinced the only thing that keeps an airplane from slamming to the ground is the hand of God holding it up. Science, schmience, it’s the breath of God and people’s prayers that keep the big birds flying…. I don’t do much flying. I do a lot of praying.
 
  SUGGESTIONS
 
There are a few minor grammatical edits that should be made on a re-write. If you’ve not put the piece through a word processor grammatical check, you might want to do that just to improve some of the syntax.

Also, in your re-write you may want to put some line spacing between the paragraphs just to give some of your more mature readers an easier read. A lot more white space will help when people are reading online. Other than that, this was a thrilling ride. Nice.

  IN SUMMARY
 
"THE EXPERIENCE OF A LIFETIME."  is an account of one person’s endurance flying down a pot-hole-lined highway in the sky. While there is no indication that the passengers actually kissed the ground when they landed in Singapore, I am fairly sure that I would have. Great account of a truly harrowing experience. Write On!
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
 

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