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 Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon"  ! Hello there, Atkbereaoh! For your first story on here, this isn't bad. You did a good job of setting the scene, and using those capital letters really emphasizes just how heated the argument is between these two. And having Mike trying to sneak out in the middle of it was a nice touch. I know this kind of thing happens to a lot of couples, sadly. The spelling was good, but I'm not sure about using those long sentences. Grammatically, I think they're alright, but it would read a lot better if they were broken into separate sentences. But that's just my opinion. Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend. Good luck in the contest, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here! PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course. PPS-And since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies" and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.
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