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Greetings, Clive!
This is pretty good. I don’t know if it’s horror as much as it is something else (although the idea of having to scoop out all the muck with his tongue does contain some elements of horror! *Sick*), but I like how you used the prompt. Having Morgan’s ‘gap of mental continuity’ being another place altogether was certainly thinking outside of the box, and starting it off with why he couldn’t remember how that foul taste got in his mouth was a nice hook, even though it wasn’t exactly what I thought it was going to be.
I was a little curious as to how the foul taste got in his mouth to begin with, though. Methinks Breekish might have had something to do with it.
I also like the Old English setting you used.
One minor typo (I only mention it cuz the rest of this is flawless in both spelling and grammar-THANK YOU!):
“Ah,” said Hingebracket,”but all is not lost.
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and I hope to see more of your entries in "SCREAMS!!!" Open in new Window. in the future!

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