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Hi Tinker , I'm 💙 Carly- Hello 2025 . I am doing this review as part of WDC 19th Birthday Celebration and it is part of I Writer in 2019. A WDC 19th B'Day Celebration Review... HAPPY BIRTHDAY WDC It is important to remember that I am not a professional. I am simply one who wishes to learn and grow in my own poetic voice. To do that, I practice my own creations and review the creations of others so that my knowledge can be furthered. That said, I want you to consider my opinion as merely that... your poem is ultimately your creation. Please feel free to use or disregard my advice as you see fit. Overall Impression: Such a lovely poem to read on a night so much like the one you portray. you employ alliteration - 'this evening's stillness Remnants of summer wane' Form: This is a free verse poem. Techniques: You employ enjambment to give the poem its flow from one line to the next. Favourite Lines: Where do I begin... I love the sensory aspects of this poem. The 'cricket serenade', 'cool fingers of air' 'skim my limbs'. I can see those brilliant constellations and it makes me want to breath in the cool, fresh clean air. I see the plane and like how you included it by only calling it a 'string of blinking red and blue lights'. I also love the contrast of 'staring in wonder' at the stars versus 'do they wonder who might be down here watching?' Suggestions: I see no grammar or spelling concerns. I believe you have done a good job with your punctuation - though this is a weak area for me. Additional Comments: I like how you let the Poet's Place Discussion help you craft your poem and then you entered a contest. Well done. I wish you luck in the contest. It is a winning entry to me. Thank you for sharing your poem. I enjoyed reading it. I look forward to reading more of your work. Do keep writing. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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