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![]() | Snow's Writing for 2019, 2020, & Beyond ![]() This book holds the items for the contest I enter in 2019, 2020, and beyond. ![]() |
Hi, Prosperous Snow celebrating ![]() ![]() My thoughts on the piece as a whole... Hello! I'm here to read your work as a fellow participant in "I Write." I am in love with your word choice in this poem! The title perfectly encapsulates your theme for the poem and your joyful faith. ![]() Whether freeverse or tightly-structured formal poetry, flow is paramount. You chose an AABB rhyme scheme for this poem, and it flows well. There is no set meter or syllable count, but your words flow smoothly, and I enjoyed the images you created with them. Your pattern of capitalization and punctuation gave me pause a couple of times, but others may not have the same issues! ![]() Because poetry is one of the briefer art forms, every word matters. You use strong language to create a confident, worshipful tone. I especially love the rhyme of faith and wraith, and your descriptions in the first stanza. Your final line sums up your feelings, calls back to the first stanza, and serves as an effective conclusion. The words "wayfarer" and "path" in your title evoke the image of faith as a road, and that metaphor is consistent in the first stanza. It might unite the whole poem if the metaphor continued in the other stanzas, too. ![]() ![]() Sometimes phrases or lines jump off the page. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Take them with a grain of salt. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Any final thoughts... It has been my pleasure to read and enjoy your work. Thank you for sharing this poem, and... Write On! ![]() ![]()
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