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queenkissy,

Here I am, a fellow "I Write in 2019" Open in new Window. reviewing your item "Once More", a 24 syllable poem using the word embark.

I love what you did with this prompt! Your poem and idea as a writer is delightful!

You share the prompt in your author's note at the bottom but not what poetic form you used for your 24 syllables.

Oh dear, I am a silly goose!! I was going to suggest one minor change if the poetic form would allow it. Fortunately, as I read it through again, I remembered no matter what form you use, in this contest you are limited to 24 syllables so you definitely can't add one. LOL

I added one the first time I read it. I had you embarking on the jagged path. With my second reading, I realized I had inserted a word that wasn't there so considered suggesting you add it.

Now I realize it would take you over the 24 syllable limitation so I must conclude your poem is perfect as it is!

It gets flying colors when I apply my read aloud test. It is very poetic in its tone and I love the way you used the syllable flow in the last two lines. If this is not a specific form, it should be!

Well done! *HeartP*




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