Hi Patrick McDonagh ! I'm back in your port for another review, this time of your new item, "Your Birthday" as part of the WDC Newsfeed sponsored contest!

Oh wow, Patrick! What an incredibly beautiful and touching poem! Thank you so much for sharing! I loved the rhymes and each stanza was lovely to read and the meter felt fluid as well. Your emotion is so real in this poem!

I only noticed a few small typos. Your words are in red below, and my comments follow:

the beds covered with roses bed's or bed is

and you know that this true and you know that this is true

So if you will except me accept

This comment isn't about your poem, but I wanted to include it anyway. It's amazing how many items you already have posted in your portfolio! Good work! I will eventually become a bit of a struggle for a reviewer to locate something to read and review though. An easy way to help people find their way around your port, is to create folders for your items. You can take a look at my port for an example if you like. You could create a folder for your short stories and one for poems to be able to group those with other like items. Or, some people choose to group by rating of the item, it's really up to you. I would recommend getting on that sooner rather than later though so that your port remains manageable for you as well as for potential readers.

Thank you again for sharing your writing! Take care,
Emily

You responded to this review 09/06/2018 @ 2:02am EDT

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