Hi Merry_Mikey ! I'm back again! This time the Random Review button brought me to your 55 word story entry!

Oh, my gosh... Mike! This is hysterical! I absolutely adore super short form writing like this because it is always incredible to me how much story and emotion one can pack into such a limited number of words/syllables/lines/etc. Your piece is witty, humorous, and so unexpected! Very nice twist at the end! Barry is a baby! Ha! The first part of the story is so much funnier reading it the second time as well after the reader knows the twist. I don't know why this doesn't have a five star rating. Maybe they didn't get it?

Is the 55 word story contest still going on? If it is, I think a link within the item to the contest would be nice for readers like me to take a gander and perhaps enter. For some reason though, I seem to remember the contest shut down ... am I right about that?

There are only a few suggestions for improvement I have for you. I would recommend putting Barry's thoughts, "Slop, again!" in italics and centering the line, "Later..." to give it a little extra separation from the story. Perhaps you might also consider upping the font size of the entire story to give it more presence. Otherwise, flawless story

Thank you for the read! Take care,
Emily

You responded to this review 09/06/2018 @ 12:26am EDT

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