Hi C. Yarn Weaver ! I'm swooping through your port today to read and review your item, "Try Me and Others" in celebration of your new account on WDC! Welcome to the site!

I enjoyed reading your poems - in fact, I read them again and again as they were so punchy and quick. Your style and formatting of these poems is spot on. I always recommend making short poems like these a larger font and giving them color and "oomph" to make them stand out on the page, and you have done that very well. Many Newbies haven't mastered the art of WritingML as you seem to have. You should be proud! Great word!

I know you say these are four separate poems, but the way you have them on the page makes me read them like a dialog, a back and forth between two speakers. It is a bit like abstract art, where the reader has to infer the meaning and the intentions of the speaker, and I like that. Even if you didn't intend your poems to be read this way, I think they tell an interesting story. Could you add some emoticons to add even more interest? Like I said before, this poem feels to me more like a piece of art meant to be experienced and interpreted in different ways based on the reader, so adding a little extra flair couldn't hurt.

Again, welcome to writing.com and do let me know if there is anything I can help you with! My email is always open!

Thank you for sharing your writing! Take care,
-Emily

You responded to this review 09/04/2018 @ 3:29pm EDT

Upgraded Membership required to use macros.Create custom macros to insert text in this editor. [Beta] X   GIPHY Search   Send a reply... Include Gift Points