Fighter [E] An attempt to describe a girl handling the world, emotionally. |
Personal Impression: The poet's choice of title is good, fitting to the poem, I hear the message of hurt, and resilience in this "fighter". The message is strong. Tone & Mood: Solemn expressions of hurt, tears, and strength Rhyme, Form & Flow: Though you use end rhyme, the line lengths vary which interrupts the flow when this is read. Perhaps re-work the lines to even them out for better flow. I would also suggest using the first two lines of the second stanza as a chorus, perhaps. Separate them from stanza two and repeat them perhaps between stanza two and three, and again between stanza three and four? Emotional Impact: I resonate with the sadness, pain of hurt, but am encouraged by the strength to fight on. Grammar/Punctuation: Stanza one, line two should be "little did she know herself". Overall, good emotion, a great start on expressing these thoughts. Write On! Deb My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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