Hi 🌑 Darleen - QoD !I'm coming through your port today with a review of your Dark Poem, "Good Enough" in celebration of your account anniversary month! I hope you are enjoying the birthday week festivities as well!

When I came in to your port looking for something to review, this piece immediately caught my eye due to the cover image - very haunting, but fitting to the piece. I do think you could add a couple other Genres to this piece though, perhaps Emotional, Personal, or Experience? The piece is a little dark, but that's not all it is. It's also very relatable and personal. An emotion I'm sure a lot of people have felt before.

Though overall your poem is very good, the one stanza that felt more awkward than the rest was the second one, beginning with the line, "caught in a play." For some reason that I can't put into words, it felt more standoffish than the rest of the poem. I felt like I was being accused of something. This stanza seems to have a different tone than the rest of the poem. Where the other stanzas are introspective, this second stanza points the finger at the reader. Particularly the lines: "is NOT the question, / it is the situation" felt like I was at fault, and perhaps that was the emotion you were hoping to give the reader, in which case, it worked!

My favorite lines in the whole poem are these: "unrealistic expectations / of societal perfections." It is really cool that they rhyme too. They pair really nicely! Re-reading the whole poem, I noticed you have several lines that end in "-tions" with the words: imperfections, question, situation, expectations, and perfections. Very nicely done tying the poem together like that!

Thank you for sharing your writing! I hope you are having a great time at WDC birthday celebration! Congratulations on your FIFTH account anniversary month as well! Take care,
-Emily

You responded to this review 10/20/2018 @ 9:14pm EDT

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