Dianne tossed another (brochures) aside that didn't appeal to her. -brochure

She watched as 1(a) alligator opened its jaws wide 2(at) the car skidded too close for comfort. 1-an, 2-as

instead of()shocked into a heart attack when one crosses the road." -being

The darker green of the cedar trees contrasted with 1()larger 2(number) of the lighter green pines. -1-the, 2-numbers

Shutting (of) the car, she turned to Karen, grinning.“We’re here! Let's get our hiking shoes on and start exploring.” -off

(Grapping) her backpack, she ran to catch up to Dianne. - Grabbing

A gator (sound) its deep-throated growl and lunged towards them.-sounded

“The ecosystems here really do take care of (itself),-themselves

(Awaken) by a noise, she opened her eyes and noticed a dense fog had fallen, - Awakened

This is an awesome story. I am living in Florida, and though I haven't done any adventures in the everglades, I can never--the--less appreciate the theme. It is a beautiful place, and your descriptions were really well done. I particularly liked the sky turning to dusk part, and the fog. The visual effect made my day as I had no trouble picturing the scenery.

I very much enjoyed reading your short story, write more.

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