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 | Crazy Out Of Love  [E] Abusive relationships, heartache and turmoil.  |
| (4.0)| Hi Georgina Elise  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  This review is in affiliation with "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" , and also part of "Invalid Item" . What I liked  This poem caught my eye with your title and brief description. I have quite a lot of experience in this area, so I was interested to read your words. I found it an emotional read, I have to say. The way you capture the rollercoaster of emotions. The way one moment, things are good and your partner has changed for the better, then you discover (to your cost) that they really haven't changed at all. I could relate to that. You just keep wanting to believe they've changed. But people like that don't. I love free verse poetry, and although this has an abcb rhyme scheme throughout, it still has the feeling of a free verse poem. I like how you centred it on the page as this highlights the varying lengths of each verse. I felt that the unevenness of line lengths mirrored the turmoil of emotions the narrator was experiencing. I'm not sure if you did that on purpose (I think you did) but it works really nicely. The verse that begins, "You told me you were wrong," is the most emotional for me. These lines brought back so many memories: "I let you cradle my body, / Even though it hurts." I also love the ending. The last line is wonderful: "Sometimes to survive in love, you must let go." So true. Once you finally realise this, you really can start to move on.Suggestions There are only a couple of places I'm not sure about. "But you were raged in blinded youth." I'm not really sure what that means. Perhaps it could be a little clearer. Also, this line, I felt was a little cliche: "Smoke, mirrors, in opaque haze." I'm not sure it really fits in the poem. Parting Comments I really like this poem. It's written with passion and emotion, and it certainly brought back some memories to me. But, the end is positive and, although it brought back those memories, it reminded me how far I've come. I'm really glad I came across this poem of yours. It's beautifully written. Great job. Choconut     My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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