There are some interesting elements to this piece that leave room for further exploration. As I read it, some questions came to mind:

1) How old is Albert and is that important?
2) What was his relationship with his Aunt and why is he so overcome with emotion?

You may want to look at expanding the piece to focus more on Albert on the lead up to seeing his Aunt, his emotions in the funeral parlour and why he was feeling that way, perhaps exploring happier times they had together.

Your description is good, however, in places, the text is too descriptive and doesn't flow as well as it could. I got the sense you were trying to get too much into a single sentence. By expanding the text, you will give yourself more room to describe the scenes, build more emotion and develop Albert's character more.

I certainly think your piece has promise and you should explore Albert's emotions more.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .