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This review contains only my opinions and suggestions. I hope you may find it useful. Overall impression Well, I think many of us can relate to the thoughts and feelings expressed in this poem! What I liked most I really enjoyed the images of spring evoked in the second stanza - the nurturing, sowing, feeding and growing. Suggestions for alterations/corrections I found it a bit distracting that all the lines begin with a capital letter. There's no need for this, and I feel like it encourages the reader to read each line as a new sentence, which disrupts the flow. Also, I'm not sure whether this poem is following a particular form, but I was a bit confused about the rhyme scheme, which feels somewhat uneven. And the two stanzas would feel more balanced if they were the same length. In conclusion... This is a nice piece summing up the downsides of winter and the joy of spring to come. I think the structure of the poem could be tightened up a bit to improve the overall flow, but it's a good effort and worth refining. Keep writing! Madi My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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