House Florent "Game of Thrones" 

A review for "The Iron Bank of Braavos" 

Hi, Royal Eduardo

My name is Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Respawn

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker flicking back into existence five miles from where he was shot and killed.

What needs your attention: An unnecessary word in this phrase, which in used, I suggest removing in because it does not add to the meaning of the sentence.

What part I liked best: There are two characters in this story I like. I like the speaker because he is intriguing and determined. I, also, like Freddie because she is a strong and determined woman. Neither of these characters are sympathetic. I like the title because it suggest a theme without giving away the plot.

Overall impression: The speaker is embroiled in a turf war between two rival factions in futuristic New York. The speaker, is a human made creation that, can respawn when killed. The problem is that he does not know where he will be when he respawns.

The descriptions are part of the action and moves the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense while revealing their personalities. I enjoyed reading this exciting story. Write on.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .