House Florent "Game of Thrones" 

A review for "The Iron Bank of Braavos" 

Hi, Warped Sanity

My name is Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Salvation (word count 1236)

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Mary hearing the sound of a woman's voice that seemed to come closer.

What needs your attention: A typo in this phrase, if she compied, I suggest changing compied to complied.

A typo in this phrase, should 9 be, I suggest changing 9 to not.

What part I liked best: I like the title of this story because it suggests a theme without giving away the plot. I, also, like the smooth flow of the plot from the beginning to the climax.

Overall impression: Mary is recaptured by the cult that her mother took her to as a child.

The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense. The interaction and conversation among the characters reveals their personalities and helps to build the suspense and the terror. I enjoyed reading this frightening and well-written story because it show why people should learn to ask questions. The climax, which made sense in the context of the story, sent chills up my spine. Write on.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .