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Hello, Cadie here reviewing on behalf of "Game of ThronesOpen in new Window.. I hope you enjoying your time here on Writing.com (WDC). This is a really great community of authors. This is simply one authors opinion of something you've written. I hope this helps.

Overall Impressions~
You've got a good poem, the fight between light and dark, dark winning for a time then light taking over. There are different ways this poem could go. Dark and Light from a christian standpoint, you are sitting in your sin and stuff (dark) when Christ comes to save you (light). Or from a lovers standpoint. You've gone down an addiction road (dark) and your friend or husband pull you out of that lifestyle (light).
You describe the fight between dark and light in your life well.

Recommendations~
The recommendations I make are just that recommendations. You have the ultimate decision whether to change this poem or not. Let me begin by saying this poem is perfect the way it is.
What I would change is.
immersed, rooted
in maddening terror
wrapping it's icy wings
around me, clutching tight
unable to hold on
I fall into oblivion

(space) continue.
This may change the format of your poem completely. The change is up to you. You've got a good poem, darkness being something you could know something about.

Thank you for sharing, Keep writing.
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