House Florent "Game of Thrones" 

A review for "The Iron Bank of Braavos" 

Hi, English Bob.

My name is Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Death Wagon

First Impression: The title and the description aroused my curiosity. The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the ambulance EMS personnel.

What needs your attention: I found no technical problems or anything else that needs your attention. My only suggestion would be to use this story as part of a novel about this society and the EMS personnel.

What part I liked best: One of the things I like in this story are the metaphors and similes because they are fresh, descriptive, and appropriate to the story. I especially like this simile, tearing through it like tissue paper.

Overall impression: The ambulance EMSs pick up a body, and are directed to go to a shootout. When the get near the scene of the shooting they encounter technical problems. The point of view chosen by the author is the ambulance driver, which is a good choice because it increases the excitement of the story. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense. I enjoyed reading this exciting story because the author showed the action rather then telling it. I am giving this well-written story a 5.0. Write on.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .