Hey Winnie,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 8^th WDC Anniversary!

         I could see this unfolding, and knew from your description what was going to happen. Didn't stop me from enjoying the story though. Alice was very paranoid, and rightly so after being raped.

         The story jumped a but though at one point, and I have to say, from my memory of 20 years ago, a chat room chat does not remain on screen when you shut the computer down. Let me get to that later in this review though.

         The flow was good, short and sweet, or not so sweet if you were Mr. Anderson. It seemed pretty realistic, except for the chat room part. Here are my comments on this.

1. You have Alice starting up her PC, but never mention her signing in to the chat room. That part initially confused me, and made me think she was looking at things her and Larry had talked about the previous night. You might want to add that she logged into the chat room, and was pleased to find Larry was there once again.

2. If Mr. Anderson had been her rapist, he might have found her. Alisa is not that fr from Alice, and maybe in his warped mind, he could have put two and two together. Then again, would Alice have wanted a name that far from her real name? Hard to say. Hard to judge there, and I'm not. Just commenting on it.


         Overall, a pretty pleasant read. A little bizarre, but a good story. Thank you for sharing.





Sum1





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