House Florent "Game of Thrones" 

A review for "The Iron Bank of Braavos" 

Hi

My name is Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Uninvited Guests

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with David seeing the three strangers huddle in the corner of his room. David's response to the three strangers is the normal response that a young boy would have in a situation like this.

What needs your attention: I found no technical problems or anything else that needed attention.

What part I liked best: I like David's mother because she did not dismiss her son's story. I also like the way the story ended because David and his mother took action themselves rather then calling in professional paranormal investigators.

Overall impression: This is an exciting story about a young boy who has three uninvited guests in his his bedroom. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense. I enjoyed reading this story because of the way the mother responded to her son's story. Her response revealed her love for her children. I am giving this well written and intriguing story a 5.0 because the active descriptions kept my attention throughout the story. Write on.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .