House Florent "Game of Thrones" 

A review for "The Iron Bank of Braavos" 

Hi

My name is Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Daily Flash 3: Woodland play

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Charlie protesting his brother insisting on keeping the swing to himself. The interaction among the boys moves the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense. The main plot of this story is about boys playing in a tree swing and what happens.

What needs your attention: I found no technical problems or anything else that needed attention.

What part I liked best: I like the way Simon responded to his brother's protest because it was normal behavior between siblings. I also like the description of the swing because the author showed the action rather then just telling about it. Another thing I like was the way the climax implied what happened to Simon after the limb broke instead of showing it.

Overall impression: The climax of this story surprised me, but it did not disappoint me because it was a logical ending to swing high in a swing attached to the limb of a tree. I enjoyed reading this exciting story because the action kept me focused on the plot. I am giving this well-planned and written action/adventure story a 5.0/ Write on.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .