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| (5.0)   Happy Earth Day Azrael Tseng!   Oh wow! I am a tree hugger and it was so sad to think of the trees and the saplings being destroyed. The metaphor the teacher gave was moving and I wonder how a child would feel being like a sapling only to be cut down. What a sad thought. Good metaphor. I could see the little ones planting the trees and the shock of one showing up to water and.... what is seen!  I love the phrase "tree-to-be -charm". Wonderful. The image in the third verse is potent. The comparison to "porrige" and the "colours" is effective. The summation lines is really a brilliant twist and shows one interpretation of future "building". Wow! What an amazing notion contrasting the two futures. The poem really honours the earth in expressing deep truths from a natural and manmade points of view. It evokes us to question the vitalness of the rationale for more pavement. It reminds me of a time I was walking in a park by the water, where there was a stony natural path along the water and bluff. One day I was there and they were making it concrete path right in the middle of the lovley park, picnic grounds. I could almost feel the earth cry and I was really peeved!!  I couldn't believe the insanity. We go there to be in nature and the path was fine for walking, biking etc. and natural under the bare feet. Ruined it for me. LOL Your form was balanced in rhyme and rhythm and it was fun to read aloud with a fine soundscape and drama. The voice was authentic and its tone varied with the different images as if in reaction. It was well conceived and achieved!  Thanks so much for sharing your vision and your honouring of trees!  The title is so sweet and added potency to the evocation of sadness at the end. Good hook!Light on the path as you write on! eyestar   "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/25/2017 @ 9:26pm EDT