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Hi The Dark Faery Author Icon,

I am Lorraine and I am reviewing your piece "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. today in affiliation with "The Newbies Academy Group" Open in new Window..

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Title: The title is suitable. It gives an idea of what your word search is about. The brief description is almost a repetition of the title. It may be worth coming up with something different and unique, to help draw people into your word search compared to anyone else. The genre you've used is good, and matches the overall item. Picking genres wisely will help you draw in more potential readers, or in this case, players. *Smile*

First Impression: You've summed up your word search in a good paragraph. You've also met the requirements of the challenge set out, so well done for that!

Challenge: Here's where the slight issue arises. When entering your words when you created your item, you hit the space bar after a large majority of the words. This has caused that space to be generated into the word search as well, meaning that there are a lot of spaces, and it gives away the location of words. To fix this, all you'd need to do was edit the word search and delete that space after the words. If you try and do the word search yourself, you may understand what I'm talking about a little better. Once that's been cleared up, the whole word search will be easier to complete. The words themselves have been chosen well, and match the required theme. There's a variety of word lengths, so great job.

Spelling/Grammar: In your short paragraph, you've written "goals for the year Some find it". There's a capital letter on the S, but there's no period before it. You just need to add that, and it'll be great. Besides that, no errors spotted.

Closing Thoughts: Thanks for rising to the challenge set in "Newbies Academy Activities Classroom" Open in new Window.. Your GPs will be on their way shortly, and you have been entered into the draw for a Merit Badge! I hope to see you around Writing.Com!

Lorraine

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