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Please remember these are my opinion and don't take it the wrong way.

Story line / Theme:I am reviewing "Santa's Rant". A story about Santa ranting about Christmas.

Characters:Good job on the description of Santa. I could see him standing at the podium talking.

Setting:There is not a lot of mention of setting other than a stage and stairs.

Suggestions:"It begins every year at the time. "It begins every year at the same time.

Just a lot of overgrown, outdated, oooh-ahhhs from people who don't really enjoy my offerings, and take them back to the store as so a possible. and take the back to the store as soon as possible

he groused as he poured another glass of cheer from the picture on the podium, and continued his rant. He groused as he . . .

Over all I feel you did a good job writing this piece. Good luck in the contest.
My favorite part: With a pedigree like this, I should be happy to do this once a year?” During his rant, Santa had emptied both the picture, and he promptly swallowed last dregs from his glass, turned, and staggered from the dais, down the three steps from the stage, and fell on his face. So much for that. He thought.


Keep on writing

Gypsy Ann