Rising Stars Member to Member Review!

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Hi Mare ~ extended hiatus ,I found your writing as part of the Rising Stars Program 2016-2017. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirit.

On Title/Subject
I found this title very catchy, very to the point, and working as a teaser to read on. Subsequently, the sub line didn't work for me because it worked almost like a negative disclaimer: MAY HAVE suggests that a lot of writers may NOT have these type of feelings so the journey into this e-book is not for them; YOUNG means all the others are excluded from the journey too. So maybe you should just be bold and state: a journey into the life and feelings of a writer. Because to my opinion, that's what this is.

You start by stating there are a lot of e-books and how-to articles out there on the subject of success stories; I did a quick search on the net and the opposite is equally true: https://www.google.com/search?q=unsuccesful+stories+of+writers&ie=utf-8&oe=utf-8... Maybe this can come in handy when revising this story?

General impressions
I found this a bit confusing in the beginning. Why? This is not a short story, it is a blog, a column, a monologue, a how-to/self-help guide. So I had to adjust my mindset after carefully reading the first time.

The second time was necessary because you have a very distinct writer's voice that you either like or dislike, you have a very unique writing style that is not really structured and you address the reader a lot which I had to get used to. Furthermore, you contradict yourself every time, within the same paragraph, within the same sentence even, and I had to learn to appreciate this all together.

But after reading your piece the third time I could internalize your writing voice so to speak and that's when I started to enjoy the read.

The content was agreeable: the journey through a life's period of a struggling writer. Every writer or aspiring writer can relate to that, I am sure. We are with many sharing different stories.

Favorite Parts
How many of you wake up each morning and go to a job you absolutely despise? All too many, and, I was one of them. So, of course, I searched high and low on the Internet for other sources of income from paid surveys (please, you barely ever even qualify for one) to freelance jobs (a story within itself) to writing.

This was a powerful paragraph. That first line was very enticing. Perhaps the sentence to start your story with, to lure the reader into the read.

Suggestions
Look at this write again and perhaps if you treat it like a personal blog or column in a newspaper you could find ways to lighten it up a little bit. You have to remember that people will have to get used to your writing style, and that costs time. The question is do you have that time or are readers turning away because it's not for them?

Final thoughts
All in all a great attempt to make sense of the confusing world of a beginning writer. I thought it was a sympathetic read. Thanks for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive