Hi there, RisanF ! I just read "Different and Cool- Part 1"  and I thoroughly enjoyed it. I hope you'll find my comments helpful, encouraging, and uplifting!

Initial Reaction

This was a nicely-done introduction to what I know will be a story about unexpected friendship. I can't wait to read the rest!

Plot/Theme

The plot flowed well and didn't leave anything that felt confusing or forced. I like the theme of free-will that seems it will be ongoing throughout the story.

Character Development

I really liked your character development in this piece--we get to see both the major characters in their natural element or "normal world" before the inciting event happens that makes their paths cross. I liked seeing Andrew's history of struggle and a bit of his own past at the school, as well as Tarah's hilarious back-and-forth on determinism with Mr. Clark. Two VERY different characters, and you did a good job introducing both of them very clearly to the reader.

Grammar/Word Choice

I wasn't tripped up by any grammatical errors or spelling errors. I would have liked to see less adverbs and more attention paid to word choice. It seemed some of the descriptions were only half-done and could have been shaped up to be more powerful, especially as far as the dialogue was concerned.

For example: "I'm...sorry, Mr. Clark," Andy said, rubbing his head in a self-conscious sort of way. "It's just this class is so tough, I can't concentrate."

The description after "said" could be tightened with better word choice. "I'm sorry, Mr. Clark," Andy said. He rubbed his head and frowned down at the desk. "It's just this class is so tough, I can't concentrate."

From the fact that Andy is not looking at the teacher, is frowning, and is rubbing his head, we can assume he's feeling self-conscious/guilty just from examining his body language in conjunction with his dialogue. This shows the reader rather than telling them.

Technical Aspects

This was a good opening chapter, as it incorporated all the elements readers will need to be convinced to keep turning the page: characteristic moments, a bit of introduction to the normal world, some conflict with Andrew/Mr. Clark, and the broader, overarching conflict of the story is introduced toward the end (Tarah's announcement that they are partners).

Overall Suggestions/Encouragements

Overall, I really enjoyed this chapter, and I do want to read more. Work on putting a bit more effort into word choice/descriptions, and this story will shine even brighter!

I hope you can take something meaningful from my feedback, and as YOU are the author, please know that at the end of the day, this is YOUR piece and my suggestions are only that--suggestions.

Thank you for sharing your work with the WdC Community!

Write On!

AlyCatAuthor

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