Greetings takingafterme

I am reviewing {item:} today as part of the "Chapter One Competition. " .
THANK YOU FOR INCLUDING OUR MANDATORY PHRASE, "HAPPY SWEET SIXTEEN, WDC!" IN PARAGRAPH ## !


OVERALL IMPRESSION
WHAT WORKED
WHAT DIDN'T WORK
OPENING PARAGRAPH
PLOT

OVERALL IMPRESSION

This is a good storyline. I liked the hooks at the beginning and end as, the one in the beginning, made me read further and the one at the end made me want to read more.

WHAT WORKED

The idea worked as this is a very popular genre at the moment and it reminds me a little of the sword and the stone. I liked the idea of the son wanting to please his father and a guardian being sent to help him in his quest. It is very mysterious and keeps the reader guessing.

WHAT DIDN'T WORK

In my opinion, it was a bit foggy in places and I had to read some things over and over again before I understood them.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph was well written but a tad confusing. At first, I thought he was a wandering minstrel until you stated, later on, he was a prince.

PLOT

The story is around a prince who's dad wants to train as a warrior but he wants to be a musician. The plot is very well thought out and most kids can relate to it. A father that wants their children to follow the path set out for them could be any father.

Thank you for sharing and keep writing.

NAME DMT1967 AKA JACKIE

"Cross Timbers Novel Workshop On Hiatis"