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 Me and dad, and the broken truck Open in new Window. [13+]
Another tall story from my younger days
by drboris Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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PLOT -
Doc and Dad again, off to rescue the truck this time. As father and son try to get the old Bedford up and running, they run into a few snags along the way. Son, of course sees things father does not, and as accidents happen along the way, it leads to humor and a lot of swearing.

SETTING -
I love the images of the two of you attempting to work together, as everything seems to go wrong. Your father reminds me of my grandfather, who also had some mad word skills, inventing his own colorful jargon. When you both were under the truck, your dad with the chainsaw, I was waiting for you to get nicked by it, but alas, only the oil filter suffered that fate.

CHARACTERS -
You and your father, on another memorable adventure.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
His glare suggested strongly that finishing was a bad idea.

“I wanted you to point the direction I should drive in, to avoid stumps.”

I was about to crawl under there with him when

Dad pulled the starter and revved the saw a couple of times while giving me the familiar

Filled with dread at my approaching gory death, I went to side of the

soft drink crate he sued/used??? to store bottles of chainsaw fuel.

Mum arrived about half an hour later, and somehow this how/whole?? affair became

By the time he had called his favourite mechanic

The dialog is filled with humor, and that's what makes these stories so fresh and exciting.

THOUGHTS -
Hey, Doc. told you I'd be back to read some more of these. And this one didn't disappoint. You have some great storytelling going when it comes to the adventures of you and your father. They are so down to earth and hilarious as to how you two manage to work together. Great descriptions and banter. You have your father's looks down to a science, really showing his range of emotions in his eyes as he looks at you, or glares. Write on!
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