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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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PLOT -
The dialog 500 isn't any easy task, but you managed to make this one memorable. An entire dialog wrapped around one of my favorite things--peanut butter cookies!

SETTING -
Loved all the images of peanut butter cookies and how they effected the outcome of the main history. Lancelot and the round table were great visual aides in all of the dialog.

CHARACTERS -
Two friends conversing about their day and how peanut butter cookies are a stress reliever and how the sweet goodies manage to solve all of the worlds problems.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
The dialog flowed well from each of your characters. It was nice how they had the same mindset and picked off where the other left off without missing a beat.

THOUGHTS -
I enjoyed this story very much. It made me laugh and smile as I read through it, honing in on the telephone conversation between two friends. It certainly was an interesting take on cookies and the craziness of the world. Wouldn't it be something if sweets could have that kind of power and save the world from itself? You added a lot of visual aides throughout, which painted a good picture of their discussion and how cookies led to subjects such as the game they played, as well as history with the references to Lancelot, Merlin and Guinevere. Nicely done. Write on!
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