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 The Path of Contempt Open in new Window. [13+]
A supernatural short story based on real history in 13th century Italy.
by Mista Winstrom Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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PLOT -
Richter is good with his hands, and lovingly makes something for his young son. He is happy and content with his life, especially his beautiful wife. Until the war came. With it brought something else entirely. His family gone, him walking around with a new friend, Ulfric, and learning the truth of his new existence.

SETTING -
Nice job setting the scene of the love he had for his family, and the devastation of war that ravaged the land. I felt so bad for him, and wondered why he was spared as well.

CHARACTERS -
Richter is devastated over the loss of his family, and tries to come to terms with their violent death. Ulfric is there to try and help him long, having saved him. It is a journey of discovery for both.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
Dialog was good, the conversations had good flow and intensity.

THOUGHTS -
A sad tale of the ravages of war, and what becomes of those left behind, with a twist of course. It was easy to identify with Richter as he struggled with the heartbreaking loss of his wife and son, and anger set in. Then the knowledge of learning he's now a vampire. Ulfric tries to tell him his own story, of the things he's learned, but revenge is all Richter can see. Nice read. Interesting story with a lot to take in, and can be turned into a novel. Write on!
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