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Curt Butt Open in new Window. [13+]
Curt seeks to ruin someone, but is he successful?
by 💙 Carly - aka Joan Watson Author Icon
Review of Curt Butt  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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PLOT -
Curt does not like gays and sets out to ruin a childhood acquaintance's life who he feels doesn't deserve his wealthy upbringing either. He sets out on a course of destruction, excited as his plan is put into motion, just waiting to watch the fallout and gain some satisfaction.

SETTING -


CHARACTERS -
Really good insight into your characters evil mind as he steps up his plan and puts it into motion. He always has that weird quirk of losing his hair.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
besides working as a computer-controlled tool operator, that it/is?

Instead [comma] he turned his hatred into snide comments and working behind the scenes.

Leave him down and dirty, crawling in the dirt. Poor as a third world country.--these two should be combined into one sentence.

You have a lot of repeating words in the same paragraph that really stand out and take away from the intensity of the story--Decides/decided/deciding.

THOUGHTS -
Nice twist at the end when Curt's meddling backfires and helps Harvey instead. Good use of karma in this aspect. You painted a clear picture of the kind of person Curt is, and how he carried out his plan, even using children to deliver the letters.
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This would be my name.
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