Hi CJHanna84 ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a good, uplifting poem, dear author, with an important message.

I fully agree with what this poem expresses. We all need some time by ourselves. Especially when everything just gets too much. Our imagination can be a wonderful place to wander around in. Especially for people who have a creative streak - we can create entire worlds in our minds. You are right that our minds can contain music, too. I know that I often have a song in my head. But whatever someone's happy place is, they should enjoy it.

On the technical side of things, I think that you have done a good job with this poem. Perfect spelling and grammar, a pleasant rhythm and flow. Well done!

Suggestions:

My suggestions for this poem are the same as for the other item I have reviewed from your portfolio:

I suggest deleting the line spaces between the lines within each stanza. That way, you can just have a single line space between the stanzas. It would make it easier on the eye, and enhance the reading experience.

I suggest completing the punctuation in this poem, including adding a period where each sentence ends. That would enhance the overall clarity.

Last but not least, I suggest allowing the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. This would perfect the overall clarity and reading experience.

My Rating:

A strong, well-written poem. I really enjoyed the read, thank you!

I did have some suggestions, but with this being a short poem, they did not have too much of an impact, and mostly it comes down to personal preference anyway. I will give this item a rating of 4.5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .