Hi Kurt Philip Behm ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is quite a beautiful poem, dear Kurt. I found it really touching.

This is another item in your portfolio that made me think. You seem to be good at that. What, indeed, is left when faith elopes? This poem invokes feelings of emptiness... what will happen if your feelings aren't recognised or acted upon or reciprocated. What if conversations are no longer remembered, what do those words then matter? What is love, if it is not true? I think that that is something many readers will be able to relate to. If you lose faith, one's perspective changes. New meaning will have to be found.

On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. I liked the rhythm and flow. It's nicely presented. All in all, I found this to be an enjoyable read.

Suggestions:

As for my suggestions, they are the same as for the other poem I reviewed earlier: perhaps you could add some more punctuation, to aid the overall clarity and impact. For example, a question mark at the end of each second line.

Also, not related directly to the poem, but I suggest adding a brief description to the item instead of -----. The reason is that if potential readers have more of an idea what to expect, they are more likely to click on your item.

My Rating:

A strong poem, that offers food for thought. I'm glad that I read it.

I did have a couple of suggestions, but those were more of a matter of personal preference. Therefore, I will still give your item a rating of 5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .