Hi Angus ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a good creepy story, dear Angus. I liked it. For Flash Fiction, it packs quite a punch. I can see why it won the challenge!

Why did he take it? That's the question. I like the denial you add to the story. The stubbornness. Somehow, he thought it was okay to take, that it was his, and that this wasn't happening. Guess he found out in the end, in what the people he took it from probably thought was a fair exchange.

The opening of the story made me curious as to what was going on. The end is nicely spooky/creepy/slightly gross in a way that fits the theme.

I like the presentation. It's pleasant on the eye. The highlights of the prompt words aren't distracting, and I like the larger font.

All in all, I think it was a good read.

Suggestions:

I only have one suggestion, Angus:

Paragraph 12:

...into her husbands eyes...

"husbands" should be "husband's".

My Rating:

This is a good, dark little story. I enjoyed the read.

I did have one suggestion, but it was only a tiny typo. So, I will give this item a rating of 4.5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .