Plot/story elements:

Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

I think you hit the humanitarian nail on its head. It's so hard to fight the good fight precisely because of the divisions of "those who have more, or less." Just from a natural resource point of view, the war on terrorism makes sense. People are alwasy attracted to religion to save them from oppression. Sometimes, oppression comes in the form of ability to survive. When that is threatened, everybody has more and you have less and in that case it's easy to declare war. I think the people who are attracted to extremist of any religions are lacking in resources enough to take care of them.


Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?

To anyone who wanted to think about how class is tied to the struggle of a greater picture of humanity.


Was there a clear purpose to it?

The author made his point of view clear and made his purpose known in the ideas of this piece.


Glows:

It was well written and generally flowed well.



Grows: Tag:

It flowed rhymthically until the last verse. It didn't have any lines that rhymed like the others did, so it made it a little inconsistent.



Miscellaneous Comments:

I only took issue wine one line, the one about the bread. For me, I think we have a lot of work to still do to overcome geneational poverty and our judgement about the matters doesn't help the situation. They don't need our judgement as much as they need opportunities to better themselves that would be equitable to a life on the streets. It's hard work competing with drug cartels who can offer instant gratification and money. We need to think creatively and come together to solve the problem. I think when I read lines like that it makes me think we're nowhere where we need to be. But, that's just my opinion.


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~Tsa~ House of Greyjoy







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