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 Widow McAllister's find Open in new Window. [13+]
What happens when three boys go out for a little treasure hunt.
by Mrs. Whatsit Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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What I read ~
A town legend has three boys curious enough to go in search of it, at night, in the local cemetery. Most people shy away from going all the way to the back, even knowing the tale of the golden sword buried there for anyone to find and claim. The boys, though scared, still take a chance, but what happens next has them running, only to return to finish the quest.

What stood out ~
Good narrative throughout, from the young boys point of view, to now an old man reminiscing about his childhood and what changed everything for him and his friends. I liked catching glimpses of his memories, how he saw things now, verses what happened during that time in his life.

Things to work on ~
Those that pass the cemetary/cemetery at night swear they have seen green glimmering thing out that way after dark.~~things perhaps?

We went right up to the headstone.

~There is also one point where the word 'grinned' is in bold, and is moved from the sentence it belongs with.


Personal Impressions ~
I liked the tale of the golden sword. Just a little bit scary enough to keep the reader wondering what will happen next. The friendships were good as were the descriptions of the Sullivan boys and how they attained their nicknames. It all had a good outcome, except for Soupy, who of course led them back to the cemetery to find what they were looking for. Write on!


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