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I know I commented on this poem in your blog but I just wanted to get your blog rating to five because I already told you million times that you're my favorite writer on this site. I picked this poem because I know you're in similar if not in the same mood now.

When I read your other poems I always find myself thinking what are you talking about and if I can find any connection to what you tell me in our conversation. Sometimes I feel annoyed when I don't get the message right away but in this poem you helped me a little bit and you put some of your thoughts within a bracket. I wish you do that often lol. The structure reminded me of e.e.cummings and [i carry your heart with me(i carry it in], though I'm not sure if that's your intention since I know you love e.e.cummings.

My favorite line is I create you in your absence because I can relate to it so much for so many reason and I'm sure many readers can relate as well. I also love that WWJD is a lullaby, it creates some kind of peaceful image in my head though the ending is kinda bare feeling and it's a little bit dramatic. I noticed you quoted word 'mine' as if you probably wanted to say that nothing ever was yours only even when it was. The whole poem has some kind of meaning within a meaning, you always manage it to leave the reader wander. I like that in your poetry but, like I mentioned above, sometimes I'm annoyed when in first reading I can't figure out what is it all about. Like, I didn't know what WWJD mean until you told me. Thank you for sharing your exceptionally great word-art. All smiles... *Smile*


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