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First of all, I am impressed with your Diminished Hexaverse poem. Is this your first try? If so, you did an amazing job! I enjoyed this. I love the way you ended it with "Quill?"

Stanza 1


L4: For wise men we march
S1: Use a comma after "march."

*Quill* Amazing work on keeping this at five syllables per line.

Stanza 2


L3: We hear Time's song;
S1: Change this semicolon to a comma. Semicolons are usually used to separate two complete sentences.

*Quill* Great job on keeping the lines at four syllables per each one.

Stanza 3


L2: The same notes
S1: This could use a comma after "notes."

*Quill* You kept it at three syllables per line. Way to go!

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