Reality Exchanged [13+] What happens when you only see a seperate reality? |
"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" THIS IS A REVIEW BY THE ANNIVERSARY GROUP IT IS A GIFT FOR YOU! Item Title: Reality Exchanged Author: Nick Taylor Type of writing: poetry Reviewed by: Lisa Noe First Impression: Hello Nick Taylor, I'd like to wish you a very happy account anniversary, I'm going to give you a detailed review today in order to aid you in becoming a better writer. "Beauty is in our Words" I'm sorry but I am a little bit confused, this is like two separate poems combined. one has a beast in a cave... and one has a man in his bedroom... why did you combine them... I read your item description so I know you are talking about an alternate reality but some how it just don't make since to me. perhaps it is just me but they are not combined properly or something. excerpt from writing: The man screamed All was taken from him His family, killed by his hand And this, was no dream suggestions: you need to somehow combine the two stories to let us know you are talking about an alternate reality. conclusion: thank you for sharing this item with me I appreciate your talent, you keep writing and I'll keep reading God Bless You.
Lisa Ann Noe ~~Image #4000 Sharing Restricted~~ My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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