Hi Tammy , I found this piece in your port and thought I'd give it a review because the title intrigued me. I hope you'll find some of my suggestions useful!

What I liked:
I think you definitely have a good storyline going on here.

General things I noticed/specific suggestions:
Who is Tagore? I'm assuming he's a poet from the context. You might also want to mention or link what the poem is.
I think your content rating is a little low on this- with the expletives involved, I think maybe 18+ or GC. Do keep in mind I'm a more conservative reader, so I may be wrong.
I feel like this story could use some dialogue- it's all narration and "he did this, she did that", which can get old easily and quickly.

Spelling/Grammar:
I don't think you need "the" before "OUR LITTLE RIVER"
"seen during monsoon"- maybe add "season" or an "s" after "monsoon"
since you say "their house" and then "by 'they'," I think "they" should be "their", since you're quoting what you previously said.
"in one conditions." should be "on one condition" or "with one condition"

Overall, this was definitely an interesting piece to read. Personally, I felt the content rating was a bit low, and dialogue would greatly help the piece. Otherwise, thank you for sharing, and keep writing!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .