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![]() | Keepers of Elements: Citadels of the Sun ![]() The Keepers are an elect group that are attuned to the elements of the earth and heavens. ![]() |
![]() ![]() ![]() Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot. What I like: This is an easy flowing tale that tells an interesting story. Opening: The first paragraph introduces a mystery, pulling the reader into the action until the end. Plot: an interesting story idea that is well developed. Scene/Setting: the setting is well done. Dialogue: good dialogue that advances the story. Characters: Good characters with good interaction. Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes ▼ When you have a chance stop by "Invalid Item" ![]() ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** ![]() ![]()
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