Hello Miwli

This is a review for "Black Magic Birthday Review Bash" .

Theme

The theme of the poem is a dark one of death and suicide which fits the Thriller theme of the competition well.

Imagery

I thought your imagery was suitably dark and moody and fits the theme of the poem. I especially like the image of the shard of broken mirror at the start and the dark hillside.

Rhythm/Rhyme etc.

I thought the poem flowed well throughout, apart from in the last verse where the first line seems to have too many syllables for the meter to work here. The rhymes I thought were very well executed

What I liked

I thought the way you fit the prompt words in your poem was great! Very imaginative and you answered the prompt requirements very well. The first verse was my favourite, I like the way it opens the poem and sets the mood and tone. I also like the line "watching the play, missing the act"

Suggestions/What I liked less

The last verse I found a bit confusing - is it being suggested that it was murder rather than suicide? I don't know what the last line refers to at all, unless this is a colloquial phrase/proverb? To me the last verse is not on the same level as the other verses and does not read as well.

Conclusion

This was a very creative entry for the cramp. I hope you do well in the contest. I enjoyed reading and reviewing your poem today



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .