Hi leo krueger ,

I just finished reading your story which I found when I selected Read & Review, "Our Evil"  and I would like to offer you the following review. Please note that this review is a culmination of my opinion and what knowledge I have. It is meant in the spirit of assistance and appreciation only. Please feel free to use what you deem useful and ignore the rest.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS
This seems like a personal poetic prose piece, similar to spoken word, on addiction.

STORY STRENGTHS
As a person who fights with their own addiction issues, not drugs, but smoking and gambling, I really like this line: Apologies are no longer accepted in the home grown treachery that started. I have frequently reminded myself that going off the wagon is cheating at Solitaire.


GRAMMATICAL/SPELLING
There are some fragmented sentences in this piece and some extra commas, however because this feels like it is spoken word, it feels more like phrasing to me instead of issues.


SUGGESTIONS
In the last sentence of this piece, I suggest changing the tense of start. I believe that this will make that last sentence more powerful.


OVERALL IMPRESSION
I like this, it is almost like a prayer. It has growth and you feel the journey. Good Job.


Thank you for sharing your work!
Write On!!