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Hi ohsoquiet, I just finished reading your story which I found in your portfolio, 52 Stories - Entry: Week One and I would like to offer you the following review. Please note that this review is a culmination of my opinion and what knowledge I have. It is meant in the spirit of assistance and appreciation only. Please feel free to use what you deem useful and ignore the rest. ![]() ![]() ![]() The own grammatical error I found was in my favorite sentence. I recommend changing it to ...beauty in everything -- even, 'water'." The quote marks should definitely be on the outside of the period. ![]() I feel that this could easily expand into a longer more involved piece. Although it is lacking in description it has an interesting premise and would make a fascinating story. Thank you for sharing your work! Write On!! ![]() ![]()
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