Hi lizco252,

I just finished reading your story which I found in your portfolio, "Invalid Item"  and I would like to offer you the following review. Please note that this review is a culmination of my opinion and what knowledge I have. It is meant in the spirit of assistance and appreciation only. Please feel free to use what you deem useful and ignore the rest.

STORY STRENGTHS
This was a really good story from beginning to end. However I have to say that your impersonation of someone who was drunk was especially clever. You didn't try to over do it and her word corrections i.e.: "I mean it's all over the orifice." She chortled and snorted, the only one amused by her slip of the tongue. "I mean, it's all over the ... office..." That was priceless.


GRAMMATICAL/SPELLING
No suggestions, no errors found.


SUGGESTIONS
The only suggestion I have for this is super minor. I would have like just a little more explanation at the end.


OVERALL IMPRESSION
This was a lot of fun. I love the humor used here, not over the top but you could feel the sarcasm.


Thank you for sharing your work!
Write On!!