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Review #4151566
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 Mud and Cockabullies Open in new Window. [E]
A childhood memory of growing up in the Marlborough Sounds
by Helen McNicol Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Overall Impression
After reading this, I'm somewhat breathless and stilled. The words are running through my head, recreating the images you showed me. I've never read a story so deeply personal, yet so impeccably written.

I was puzzled concerning the beginning of the story, why include it with the actual telling? But as I read, it became clear that the reason for writing carried the same weight and magic of the actual story.

Recalling the first and last names of my childhood friends would be a challenge for me. I can only think of one right now. Maybe because you lived in a small town, the names were spoken more, the relationships more intimate.

There were no wasted words here, and the verb choices you made were exquisite. The story kept me entranced all the way to the conclusion. I thought, well, this can't get any better, but I was so very wrong.

The last two sentences were a jump from childhood to adulthood. They read strikingly different from what came before, and if the work was anything short of perfection, the conclusion sealed the fate of this story.

It's beautiful, and something I'm unlikely to forget. I'm not flattered when people tell me my work is publishable. I think they are just words. But when I tell you this work is publishable, I'm telling the truth.


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