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Review #4151383
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 Of Christmas Trees and Dirty Dishes Open in new Window. [13+]
A Short story about loss and recovery. You're never truly alone.
by Storygirl95 Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi,
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Overall Impression
What a gorgeous story. In the beginning, the mood was sad and melancholy, a common enough feeling at Christmas. I doubt I'm the only one related to Maggie and her plight.

Setting/Plot/Characters
A very prosy beginning brought forth both beauty and hopelessness in equal measures. Then Maggie had a moment where she found it beautiful. Excellent foreshadowing.

I was extremely impressed by the setting you created in her apartment. The sense of despair was overwhelming as I pictured her sad and small life.

A continual referral to 'that day' drove the plot forward. It was somewhat of a relief to learn an event sent her spiraling, that she wasn't caught in the web of clinical depression vs. situational.

Everything you described was familiar, yet expressed in a such a graceful manner. The whole plot pivoted when she started chasing the man she thought died. The pace picked up when the chase began, and the mystery deepened.

I can't express how happy I was when the explanation became clear. This type of story is exactly the kind I like to write. I'm glad there's more than one of me.

A few thoughts
families rejoicing together as they preparedI think this would make more sense with one consistent verb tense.

I shake my heads to clear my thoughts.
I don't think she has more than one head. lol

as I the assimilation is no longer painful.
Hmm. Not sure what happened here.

Anniversary reviews sometimes bring members back to WdC. I hope you'll return to write more. Oh, by the way, the unusual title was the initial draw.


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