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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Overall Impression
Wow! Talk about word economy. You captured the art of story writing, which can be exhaustive, in just two stanzas and sharp word choices.

I actually have the opposite problem. My stories become too long. However, there are also occasions when I apply the same technique described here. To further enrich the stories, details are needed. My favorite was dressing up the heroine.

The first stanza was unique and that originality grabbed me and wouldn't let go. Measuring a story and throwing it against the wall. Great description there.

The second stanza was humorous and clever. The words ran so fast, I was breathless by the conclusion. It reminded me of two things. First, when I stop thinking, everything falls into place. Conversely, sometimes the writing comes one word at a time. A hair-yanking experience.

A thought
What you wrote is something I've never tried, so please excuse my question. I don't understand why the last line of the first stanza was [against]. It didn't match up with the first line in the second stanza.

You nailed this poem (?) with the last line. Well done!

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